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municipal spear description:

being used to attack to attack rampaging monsters.

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From the EOL drink description:
Its supposed to keep you pumped...

That should be "It's".

Ah, its and it's, my old nemesises... nemesii... whatever. Fixed.
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When using a tenth blue lawn dart against VILLAIN:
Your considering hurling your dart at V.I.L.L.A.I.N.'s shields...

I recommend changing that to "You're considering" or, to match the verb tense of the other combat messages, "You consider".

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All of these are thanks to the wonderful Hoy*.

The message when looking at VILLAINCPU collections is missing a "was":
"[...] Central Processing Unit pulled from the Variable Input Limitless Logic Something Something.[...]"

VILLAIN's shield message should use "An" when no darts have been used:
"A interlocking array of shields [...]"

One of VILLAIN's miss message misspells hex:
"It tries to convert you to hext[...]" --This one is fixed

In the Vault, leagues' should be singular:
"This room contains the rewards of your leagues' efforts [...]"

The item is called "blue lawn dart", but in the Records, it's called:
"Blue Data Darts"

Fixed these up, thanks! The darts one will be changed in all new logs.

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The orwhal levels its horn at you, shooting a single massive fireball in your direction. If the 154 (fire) damage is any indication, you made it angry.
Since the foe is presented as a she I suppose these aren't right ;)

edit:

also
The orwhal turns towards you, flames coruscating from its horn and enveloping you. It's as scalding as this description is verbose, dealing you 184 (fire) damage.
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LI Inc. Headquarters
It's been a while since any new business opened in downtown Twilight, particularly one big enough to need several towers. Knowing the city's luck, it'll be an arm of some vast criminal conspiracy.

You make your way to the lobby and through its forest of floor-length banners. Each one advertises a different computer, but nothing better than you could build and nothing cheaper than a new Lexura.

LI Inc. Headquarters
It's been a while since any new business opened in downtown Twilight, particularly one big enough to need several towers. It's a shame that this one turned out to be behind releasing a rogue program and almost destroying the city.

Deep in the empty hall, you find a downcast receptionist. "Well, they say that every cloud has a silver lining. Everyone else in LI Inc. got arrested... but, hey, now I'm my own boss."

"At least with the help of heroes like your League, we were able to capture the copies of VILLAIN that got loose."

Back to downtown Twilight.
Back to the main map.
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Plural of municipal darts:
You have 2 municipal dartss in your inventory.

Thanks for the MTN, Cris!

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From the league roof, after the advent of the new league foe:
..."that begin rampaaging through the city."

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Data platemail has a typo in its description.

"I suppose it was inevitable that something like this came alone."

Should be along.

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The new effect, finger-licking fingers, has no description popup. The id used is 664.

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jumbo jawbreaker description
This is probably the second largest jawbreaker you've ever seen. It's almost as big as your fist, and rather than being being made by some cruel confectioner,
Been been fixed, thanks!

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When consuming multiple gelts:
you probably should have taken the pieces of circuitboard out too,
Naw, I think that's fine. "Circuitboard" as in a material rather than "a circuitboard," but maybe I'm crazy. -Kinak

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Patojonas wrote:When consuming multiple gelts:
you probably should have taken the pieces of circuitboard out too,
Naw, I think that's fine. "Circuitboard" as in a material rather than "a circuitboard," but maybe I'm crazy. -Kinak
Erm, problem is that in the single consume message they're 2 words, or at least they were when I posted this here, let me know what you decide.

In any case, http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/circuitboard?s=t

Errrrr... derp. Fixed as all one word, thanks.

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From one of the Orwhal's special end-of-round attacks:
The orwhal tears a (conventiently empty) building out of the ground...

That should be "conveniently".

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hero dash trainer dodge note
You dive into some mud to avoid the attack. It's not dignifed, but at least you're used to it thanks to
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One of Lavagna's miss messages:
Lavagna prepares a tremendous sonic assault, but you do the expedient thing and just put your hands over your years.

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december water clock description:
Before calendars were used for innacurately predicting the end of the world
Also, if you feel like it: http://th.blandsauce.com/wiki/Category:Typos

Most have probably been reported here but I've checked a few and they weren't fixed so let us know which ones you've been over so we can update the wiki :mrgreen:

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Patojonas wrote:december water clock description:
Before calendars were used for innacurately predicting the end of the world
Also, if you feel like it: http://th.blandsauce.com/wiki/Category:Typos

Most have probably been reported here but I've checked a few and they weren't fixed so let us know which ones you've been over so we can update the wiki :mrgreen:
Fixed that one, maybe February for the big cleanup :)

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If you catalyze and it triggers during training at camp camping camp, there's no space or line break between the catalyze messages and the training messages.

Fixed that formatting, thanks!
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From Villaintine's truffles:
If they can make evil chocolate, imagine they things they could do with a freeze ray!
I assume that should be the.

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hyper-c, drop single use:
You place the drops of hypercaffeine on your tongue. In the age-old battle between "tastes great" and "less filling" this particular beverage is solidly on the side of "less filling." Though since it's a single drop, that's not terribly surprising.
should be singular

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You boot up the autolumberjack. He's pretty old, so his "boot up" involves an actually boot.

Actually fixed, thanks!
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The combat message at the beginning of the fight, after using a deja voodoo doll:
You have a weird moment where you think you remember remembering this moment, or maybe it it's all just a little bit of history repeating.
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maybe it's part of the repeating joke?

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Sanjuro wrote:The combat message at the beginning of the fight, after using a deja voodoo doll:
You have a weird moment where you think you remember remembering this moment, or maybe it it's all just a little bit of history repeating.
Patajonas wrote:maybe it's part of the repeating joke?
I'm not sure what the original intent was, but I went ahead and expanded it into a more obvious joke. Thanks you two :)

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In the 'item' item description:

It's kind of looks like ...

Fixed
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After having used Water Boy's Call:
You ask your unspeakable friend to carry you into battle once again. Thankfully all Water Boy products come with an English to Squamous Horror From Beyond The Stars phrase book.you slide in close to your opponent and slash quickly with your blade, hitting for 243 + 344 damage.
Got some message interaction issues.

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current plural for autoslapping gloves is:
autoslapping glovess

Clearly a typo... missing an 'e'. Thanks!

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Paint splattered hat effect list:
at least seven stuations
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When using the cosmic jester tuned to acid:

Kyoami burns your opponent with a caustic wit 17 (acid) damage.

Seems there should be a "for" in there or something. Not sure if the other elements need prepositions or not.

Fixed that up, thanks! And the others look good.
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One of the thin blue mole's miss messages:
The mole calls up some of his friends from the academy. The mole who makes the funny noises with is kind of funny, but none of them seem very dangerous.

Either the word "with" should be removed, or something is missing between those two highlighted words.

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Sorry, but that thin blue mole miss message looks like it still needs some work:
The mole who makes the funny noises which is kind of funny, but none of them seem very dangerous.

Maybe the "which" should be removed?

fixed, again
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"The mole flees, joining up with it's commrades to form... a giant molebot."

Tsk tsk, Kinak. There's a usenet group you should join: alt.languages.english.possessive.its.has.no.apostrophe :P

Also, "comrades".

It's fixed :P
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From the description for prince prints:
...but these are older version of those prints...

That looks like it should be either "are an older version" or "are older versions".

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When you begin the fight against Moletron:
Well, that means its up to Twilight's heroes to drive them back to the shadow.

*cough, cough* it's *cough, cough*

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The last sentence of the description for alien mineral water:
Which is to be expected, after all, its alien!

*blah blah* it's *blah blah*

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One of the Red Mole's hit messages:
The mole goes down the list it has its hands, calling friends until there are enough to beat you up.
Is that missing at "in"?
EDIT: Now that I think about it, maybe you should shorten it to "its list".

Here's one from the wiki that I haven't been able to verify yet:
The mole tries to stab you in the bank, but you're on to him.

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From the Hanging Pinata description in the League Lobby:
You're pretty sure there's a special exceptions for evil mechanized pinatas, though.

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From one of Moletron's miss messages:
Nothing says "I'm sorry" quite like an invation to the mole people's office building bonfire afterparty.

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