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If you catch spelling and grammar issues, post 'em here.

It's not really spelling and grammar so much as general oddness.


There's also a missing punctuation mark behind the "You gain 5 intellect", but I'm not sure if it's a ! or a fullstop, and you can't italicise fullstops anyway. Unless there isn't, in which case you need better grammar.

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From the quest adventure A Skeptic Sandal.

Can we still double post?

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Missing word in the adventure text, I think.

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After completing the quest, before going to the station.

Yay double post?

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From the game manual:

Computer Lab?This is where you'll set up your crime-fighting computers, and run useful software on them. (Currently not implemented.)

I don't think this is true.

Also, maybe I'm just dense, but I'm still not sure what to do with the stuff I get from the Vlad's. Maybe put a hint in here?

In the nearby slums, after choosing "See if anything is going on at the park":

Is this anything more than the elements being updated since the game manual was written?

"Like the rest of the game, this chat unlike the rest of the game, is still in alpha."

...buh?

I think I've addressed all of the above.

Hey cool A Naked Jew registered!

Err... uh...
Ya. Bugs and stuff. Grammar.

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TheK3vin- #325

http://soundcloud.com/thek3vin

Another inaccuracy in the manual:

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The churches are empty / The priest has gone home / And we are left standing / Together alone
--October Project: "Dark Time"

The other day, some monster in "through the dimensional gate" did psychic damage to me. Maybe I'm just too used to the KoL colored damage = elemental thing.

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Jesus (#229) | Solitude (#257)

To clarify:

Elementals the class work their magic with the four elements of classical tradition: earth, air, fire, and water.

In the game, there are many different things that can hurt you as part of enemy attacks, or which you might deal to enemies as part of your own attacks. These things are pure physical, fire/heat, ice/cold, electric, sonic, acid, and psychic damage. These things all get color coded, and equipment may provide you with partial resistance to them. However, they're not really "elements" per se. Because of the possible confusion, I'm trying not to officially call the damage types elements, the way KoL does. (The reference to elements has been removed from forcegloves--they just list which damage types they reduce.)

However, at the moment I'm without a good general term for all those damage types other than "damage types". If anyone's got something better, let me know.

To further elaborate, an Elemental hero may tap into fire (the element) to do fire damage, or tap into energy in the air to unleash a lightning bolt (electric damage), or manipulate water to send out an ice bolt (ice/cold damage). The Elemental hero is using the four elements to do some of the available damage types.

...not the one right above it, unless i'm missing a joke or something.

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hi, TheK3vin. dunno ya that i know of, but hi.

Well you were pretty well known on kol (unlike me). So I'm not suprised that you didn't know me, but hey, now you do.

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TheK3vin- #325

http://soundcloud.com/thek3vin

i was? i mean... i am? huh.

now you've made my unblushing module buggy.

"An alligator..."
Though alligators and crocodiles aren't the same thing, so it might be better to just change it to "A crocodile..."

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First visit at the police department after catching the pyromaniac dude. "...seems to be spillng over into the sewers..."

The journal entry after completing the galleria quest. You appear to be missing a word.

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...buh?
also the is still there.

Not really a spelling error so much as continuity--



I didn't finish up the quest with John Steele until afterwards.

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There are some that call me... TechSmurf

In Rythm of the Rage there is a typo:

A thin, pale young man with spiky black hair stands at the back of the crowd, frowing vigorously...

I believe you meant 'frowning' with an 'n'. Minor, trivial, but it's here and it's there. Edits, edits everywhere.

Note to rune: please use normal text except in very rare circumstances. Bold, italic, and colored only make it less readable. Thanks!

The "Groundquake" combat text is misleading: it says my opponent is out of it for a "turn," but he's only out for one round of combat. Need the language to be consistent with the definition of "turn" that's used for the game as a whole.

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"I don't have enough time to do all the procrastinating I want to."--Littleghost, in chat

Gender Bender:

My character is female, and in "Little, Old, and a Lady, but Not Helpless," she gets called a "brute." A little old lady would reserve that word for men. Try "hooligan," maybe?

(Also got called "buddy" somewhere around Somerset Square and failed to note it. Does anyone remember where?)

Overall, it looks like you're consciously trying to keep a good gender balance in your characters. Thanks for that!

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"I don't have enough time to do all the procrastinating I want to."--Littleghost, in chat

Good point about the turn, Dr. W.

And it's probably inevitable that I'll slip up a little on the gender now and then. I try to be neutral or provide specific variants, but it's tough not to reflexively assume your own now and then.

Thank you for the first, and no worries on the second. Like I said, it's obvious that you're trying, and it seems to me that you're doing a darn good job so far. (Not just with the NPCs, but also with the language as whole.)

I realize that you have a lot on your plate right now. Being the offspring of an editor that I am, I'll continue to point out the few slips that I find and trust that they get added to a to-do list somewhere!

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"I don't have enough time to do all the procrastinating I want to."--Littleghost, in chat

in the text that appears when using one of the skills (Absorption) the word "absorbent" is misspelled as "absorbant."

The testimonials page? "two slices of pumpkin bread and a glass of milk". =D

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too many "the"s in there.

It is on the testimonials page. "Outated" should be "outdated", with a d.

From "Two Paths Diverged in a Darkened Street":

"The sudden blat of a siren"

...Though a siren that goes "BLAT BLAT BLAT" would be amusing.

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Sleep lightly, for fear that The Slumberjack will catch you in your dreams.
There are some that call me... TechSmurf

What's wrong with this one?

Blat. To make a loud or raucous noise.


New forum policy:

Nobody is allowed to question my vocabulary without looking it up at dictionary.com first, or you will be mocked mercilessly. I use dictionary.com because I teased someone else once for not looking it up, and it turned out their dictionary really didn't have the word. But I refuse to be limited to the quality of words found in small dictionaries.

Since this is a new rule, I'll let you off with a mild joshing. Fair?

To be fair, boss, "blat" is normally used in an onomatopoeic fashion. Trumpets blat; sirens wail.

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The churches are empty / The priest has gone home / And we are left standing / Together alone
--October Project: "Dark Time"

And he may do both when he reads that :)

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Jesus (#229) | Solitude (#257)

knot, right?

I know "blat" is a word, but I figured it was just "blast" typoed. Fits better.

"BLAT BLAT BLAT!"

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Sleep lightly, for fear that The Slumberjack will catch you in your dreams.
There are some that call me... TechSmurf

Okay, then the other forum rule is you must explain what you think is wrong with the thing you've pointed out. Because if I think it's right and you don't, and I don't know why, I'm either going to jump to incorrect conclusions or give up and ignore it.



Hmm. Maybe I've heard some sirens you haven't heard, then? Or maybe I'm striving to be creatively different, instead of sticking to the cliche. Or maybe I'm just full of it. Still, I stand by my choice in this instance.

The auction house notification about being out-bidded is a bit off for certain items.

Probably a pain to put in all the silly variations though <_<

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Jesus Fish - (#22)/Ichthys - (#23)

Not major, but 11 is just after midnight?

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"In any case, it's a bit unwieldy, but it's made of some kind of metal that/which tends to spark a lot when it contacts other metals."

missing word. suggestion(s) in bold.

T'would really help if I had a reference for that. Which item? Some of these things have been around for nearly a year, and I don't have them in memory. Well, *my* memory. Computer memory probably.