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Blink's Journal. August 10th, 2008.

Tripped over garbage can.

Patched things up at work this morning. Decided to join city in morning commute. No problems. Beginning first patrol. Looking back at previous Journal entry, too much time wasted on making up similes. Like over-worked salesman selling lies who spent too much time talking to strangers instead of wife. Empty. Greasy. Single. Crap, did it again. Heard news about trouble in Neighboring and neighborly neighborhood. Close enough to me in Somerset. Will start there. Neighborly thing to do.



Blink's Journal. August 10th, 6:24pm

Encountered road-enraged bike courier. I ask myself why she's riding a bike this late at night. Possibly middle-woman for illegal Canadian Insta-noodles cartel. Will investigate in full at another time. I rip off bike chains as souvenir. Pocket some of biker's chips as well. Is this right? Mugging the mugger. Yes. It is.

I arrive at the Neighboring and neighborly neighborhood. It's narrow streets full of grim and filth from the Mad frisbee players and elderly bowlers alike breeding in the same rat's nest. I look for trouble in all its forms. Stared at by strangers for my dyed crime-fighting pajamas. Stop undressing me with your eyes. Skateboarding teens swarm pass me like flies in the bitter cold night smelling of hot dogs and sweaty unwashed week-old clothes,talking about life difficulties of warm home and free meals and in-ability to buy 500-Chip titanium chassis computer.
Justice is dead.

Gunshots draw me like a moth to flame towards a strip-mall parking lot. An officer doing his job pinned down behind his vehicle by gang members. Like a cat seeing its prey, I sneak behind them with utmost easiness. Plan ruined. Policeman takes out two of the three criminals. Policeman suddenly howls in pain like man forced to watch Twilight movie. I attack the remaining gang member. I win. Afterwards, backup arrives and policeman taken to the hospital. I watch as the red and blue light mixture of the cop cars and ambulance erratically splash across the asphalt of the empty lot. Like a dance of capitalist butterflies hell-bent on destroying China with tornadoes on the other side of the world. Beautiful. Damn, should have asked for ride. Will now have to walk to Hospital to talk to cop. Seems like good opportunity to introduce self and further superhero career.

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Hah, the garbage can thing is gold. Repeating the 'justice is dead' line is nice, and the last line somehow amuses me.

There seems to be a slight capitalization goof in 'I Rip off bike chains as souvenir.', and perhaps another in 'Encountered Road-enraged bike courier.'- speaking of which, road-enraged bike couriers are actually all female in the game. Anyways, the spelling/capitalization looks to otherwise be good, though, and the grammar goes with the style.

Hm... but does this take place in '08, as in the first chapter, or in '09, as this chapter would seem to indicate?

The story's shaping up nicely, though I'm concerned the writing style could become stale; meh. Can we get you to keep writing this?

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The date is based off of the day Ive joined and the time Ive spent in-game. I will be going through the quests "Chronologially" since newer players would experience the newer low lvl quests in order. When new quests pop up, I wont do those in order and will be mentioned at the point of where my character is. I'll fix those lil grammar errors. Thanks for pointing out that the writing might get stale, definitely something to think about. And sure, I was thinking of doing this when Ive clocked out my character.

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Beautiful.

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Well, I've got a hat!

btw Im taking suggestions to jazz it up a bit.

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My suggestion, make the posts in one thread instead of multiple ones.

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I've won the 100k DD bet so many times, I should have the title "Mr. Luck"