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PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2014 9:19 pm 
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It's also automatically started up the penultimate item in your queue. Because it's the future!
I actually meant "it's" as in "it has" there. I think I'm okay, but... its and it's :?

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 22, 2014 8:57 am 
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In computer lab when decrypting a disk:
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Note you won't make any progres on the decryption until Vlad's Decryptonomicon software is running.


Also, might want a : after note or change to "Note that".

Added s and that, for clarity. Thanks!


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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2014 12:05 am 
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You fire the rocket high into the clear sky above Twilight. Clouds suddenly form, followed by a lightning bolt tracing the rocket\'s trail back to the English tourist for 120 damage.

When using agl rocket

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2014 12:07 am 
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You set off the loudest, shriekiest firework in the world. Your opponent can\'t seem to decide whether to punch you to make it stop or just lie down and accept the 55 damage sonic overload.

Robot Number 1 complains furiously until your opponent agrees to a costume change. It almost has to be less protective; fanservice (fan service?) and proper armor rarely go hand in hand.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2014 12:08 am 
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You light the sparkler, festively jabbing the matarkhis for 42 damage and 42 damage. Then you spell your name out a few times in the sparks.

It\'s like an independence day rave and all the villains are invited!

Victory! You beat up your foe and win the combat!

Thanks! Removed all these slashes. Silly slashes.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2014 12:26 am 
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Whoops, just noticed this one today. One of the deranged quester's miss messages:
The adventure has a hypothesis that, if he hits you hard enough, loot will pop out.

missing an R there

Typos pop out! Fixed, thanks!

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2014 8:09 pm 
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Attempting to use the Psychic Heckling opening against a robot:
Trying to heckel the servant robot is like arguing with your computer at work... momentarily satisfying but ultimately fruitless.
"heckle"

EDIT: To erfMortium, it appears that "fanservice" is correct:
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/Fanservice

Fixed, thanks! Also, I didn't notice if fanservice was marked upthread but I usually see it without the space now.

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 02, 2014 12:53 am 
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Using independent throwdown:

Combat!
You throw down the throwdown, dealing the hunter-killer drone 20 damage damage with its thunderous peal. Wow, they\'ve really improved these since you were a kid.



Slash!

Slashed the slash, thanks!

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 07, 2014 9:12 pm 
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Casting a spell with Chlorine Lad's ladel ladle:
You send out a pulse of mental anguish, dealing 24 damage to anything in the area.
The contents of Chlorine Lad's ladel put the worst institutional lunches to shame, dealing your opponent 3 damage.

Ladled out a fix.

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PostPosted: Sun Jul 13, 2014 11:03 pm 
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Here is one of the angry rioter's miss messages:
Your opponent attacks ... You wouldn't like me when I get angry," the rioter says.
"You're already angry," you point out.
"Huh, you're right." The guy takes a while to sort that out.

That first line looks like it's missing a quotation mark.

Quotationed!

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 17, 2014 8:50 pm 
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When using the independent throwdown, there is an extra "damage" after the sonic damage:
You throw down the throwdown, dealing the buzzing swarm 27 damage damage with its thunderous peal. Wow, they've really improved these since you were a kid.

Threwdown on some typos. Thanks!

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Attacking while Seeing Double:
You attack ... you're stilling seeing double, so you decide to aim for the one on the right...

Stilled!

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 01, 2014 2:47 am 
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Virtual Lad's goggles:
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full of then-high tech doodads and wizzbang gimgrackery.


Should be gimcrackery.

Fixed! In other news, grimcrackery isn't just a word Cris made up.


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PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2014 8:57 am 
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You carefully remove the foil wrapping. Man, the \"good ol\' days\" certainly had tiny packs of gum.


backslashes.


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PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2014 12:09 pm 
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You carefully remove the foil wrapping. Man, the \"good ol\' days\" certainly had tiny packs of gum.


backslashes.


Deslashed!


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PostPosted: Sun Aug 03, 2014 1:58 am 
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Using the Whipping Winds opening:
While the mob instigator is picking himself off the ground, you can plenty of time to whip the hot desert air into a dust devil...

You're right, canning time is too much. We'll find it instead.

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 05, 2014 8:59 pm 
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I'm still seeing that typo.

While the Pax Verde operative is picking himself off the ground, you can plenty of time to whip the hot desert air into a dust devil...

Sorry about that. Typo was in two places.

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Forgot to mention this. In the Heirloom Derby awards messages, in some of them, the word 'quite' is italicized, and in some of them it isn't.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 09, 2014 12:50 am 
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Clicking the link to add shelves to your mall store:

Somebody at City Hall tipped off the Twilight Carpenters' Union, Local 408, that you were thinking about doing some renovations to your shop. From what the papers say, the union has been locked in negotiations with the City over the proliferation of DIY permits among residents in Sommeset. Nobody can remember when the talks started, but the union has been work-to-rule since, and the City has been unable to grant any permits for scab-work. The Local 408 has sent a representative to talk to you about "your needs."

With a confident swagger the Union Rep walks into your shop and looks around the place without caring that you are there. After he grunts and makes a few notes in a pad he pushes the pencil behind his ear. When he finally talks to you its close and its business. His nicotine breath is only a few inches from your nose. He says, "Looks like you already have 20 shelves. If you're gonna want 10 more it's gonna costa ya, bub."

He issues you a stack of forms that look like a contract. Bobbing a meaty finger over a line at the bottom he says, "Sign here."

You look at the price and hope the strike ends soon.

"Somerset"?
"it's"?
"it's"?
"cost"?
"a stack" "looks"?

Renovated the text. Thanks!

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 09, 2014 4:42 am 
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Feh. Subject-verb agreement rules lead to weird things. Yes, look should probably be plural since stack is a plural noun, even though we're talking about a single stack. The problem is, when you say it out loud, "He issues you a stack of forms that looks like a contract," it just sounds weird.

Of course, this is where I'd probably cheat and just rewrite the damn thing to keep the intent but dodge the rule.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 09, 2014 7:41 am 
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Cristiona wrote:
Feh. Subject-verb agreement rules lead to weird things. Yes, look should probably be plural since stack is a plural noun, even though we're talking about a single stack. The problem is, when you say it out loud, "He issues you a stack of forms that looks like a contract," it just sounds weird.

Of course, this is where I'd probably cheat and just rewrite the damn thing to keep the intent but dodge the rule.
The answer to most rules in the English language: "avoid X because you'll have to choose between being wrong and sounding dumb."

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 17, 2014 9:39 pm 
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Just noticed this one today, in the description for the multiversal derringer:
Even though it's tiny and doesn't have any noticiable recoil, this alien weapon is as dangerous as it is fashionable.

"noticeable"

Thanks for... um... noticing...?

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2014 10:29 pm 
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Multi-consuming cherry gelatin:
You eat half of the available gelatin and think you're getting full, but after a moment's introspection you realize there's room for more and finish the rest it.

Missing an "of" between "rest" and "it".

Fixed the rest of it.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 31, 2014 10:29 pm 
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From the description of the extra-dimensional taffy puller:
... which means you can use this handy little device can fold, spindle, and mutilate reality.

"to"?

Antifolded, unspindled, and demutilated.

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 08, 2014 3:54 pm 
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Quote:
*with an deft flick of the wrist, you pull <foe> in x different directions at once, making him yelp in '''X different languages'''.


Miss message doesn't need fixing in there :wink:

Fixed it with an deft flick of my keyboard. Thanks!


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PostPosted: Mon Sep 29, 2014 9:07 pm 
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Eating metal gear salad:
They always say to eat your greens. You're not quite so sure on the silvers, but figure you might as well eat those too.

"slivers"?

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PostPosted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 8:12 am 
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Sanjuro wrote:
Eating metal gear salad:
They always say to eat your greens. You're not quite so sure on the silvers, but figure you might as well eat those too.

"slivers"?


I assumed it's a color thing: green (salad), silver (metal).


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PostPosted: Tue Sep 30, 2014 11:09 am 
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Yeah, it's supposed to be silvers. Just, you know, maybe not my best joke :lol:

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 03, 2014 9:24 pm 
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Using the new SQUID disc:
You watch the SQUID disc and immediately regret it. It\'s a huge scary world out there...

Curse you it's and it\'s! Curse yooooooooooou!

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 11, 2014 12:51 am 
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One of the phonophobic rocker's miss messages:
She tries to play something, but her hoard of screaming fans drown it out.

I looked it up. According to my dictionary, a hoard is "a stock or store of money or valuable objects, typically one that is secret or carefully guarded".
A horde is "a large group of people (chiefly derogatory)".

Thinned out the rocker's hoard a little bit. Thanks!

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One of the pyrophobic flamethrower's miss messages:
The flamethrower tries to throw flame at you, but suffers an bout of fear instead, followed by an existential crisis.

EDIT: Also, one of the electrophobic transformer's miss messages:
The transformer reaches out a wire to shake your hand, but you find it's can't transform electricity into joy.
Um, "its""it".

Fixed, thanks! Yeah, I'm mixing things up. Next I'll be swapping in 'tis for it's!

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 15, 2014 8:23 pm 
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One of the thug's hit messages:
He slugs you with his baseball bat. While you write in pain he takes a lap around some imaginary bases.
"writhe"?

Can't blame me for that one! Fixed.

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PostPosted: Thu Oct 23, 2014 8:12 am 
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You have a billboard covered with subtly incorrect scientific facts and misued equations. That... seems dangerous.


misused?


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PostPosted: Sat Nov 01, 2014 11:36 pm 
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From the description of the ff0000 pill:
Or, you know, it'll heal like. Like every red pill in every game ever.

"you"?

Fixed!

EDIT: I have decided to use FF0000 from now on. :)

Yay!

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 02, 2014 11:16 pm 
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From the description of the traumophobic neanderthal:
After a hundred thousand years in the big giant hole in ice, this costume contains many of the Neaderthals' powers.
Missing an "n" in there.
Also, is there supposed to be a "the" between "in" and "ice"? Or is that supposed to mimic the foe's speech patterns?

Fixed! And "big giant hole in ice" is a specific joke, yes.

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Patojonas wrote:
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You have a billboard covered with subtly incorrect scientific facts and misued equations. That... seems dangerous.


misused?


*bump*

Sorry about that, should be good now.


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Using the 0000ff pill:
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You choose the ff0000 pill...


and Multi-using 0000ff pills:
Quote:
You choose the ff0000 pills...


No I didn't! I chose the 0000ff pill(s) ! :(

Now I kind of want to watch that movie. "Red, I meant red! Huh?" *goes back to work*

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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2014 12:04 pm 
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Your 2 micromillipantss have been moved to your storage area


Pantses, precious.


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He takes a small crystal form his pocket and throws it at your feet, causing an explosion


should be "from". This is what happens when people don't check me for typos, sorry Kinak :mrgreen:

It's alright, it's nice to have company! :)


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