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solar disc still displays:

Occasonally blocks enemy attacks.

Fixed again, with feeling. Thanks!

Snicker snack multiuse:

You, perhaps unwisely, eat the vorpal snack. The snacks ruin your perfectly beamish day and, well...

Shouldn't that be pluralized there?

Should be, yes. Thanks!

The shopekeeper mails in your silver stars for you and waits patiently for your dehydrated goats to arrive in the mail.

Fixed Ye Olde Woke.

When consuming a single snicker-snack:
It would make for a good story, but empiricism makes you fruminous and, well...

I checked the poem, and Lewis Carroll spelled it "frumious". Of course, I realize it's a nonsense word, so I'm not sure if that was intentional.

Nonsense words are the most important to get right. Fixed.

Multi-using mint goat milk:
You drink plenty of milk milkshakes until you don\'t feel quite so stupid to yourself, whatever that means.

Aside from the "don't", I'm not sure if "milk milkshakes" was intentional. The single-use message calls it a "minty milkshake".

Fixity fixed, thanks!

Consuming a single goat latte:
You slam the latte. It\\\'s sort of like kopi luwak, but with goats... let\\\'s never think about that again. Anyway, it\\\'s pretty good.

Muti-using goat latte:
You drink latte after latte. These are sort of like kopi luwak, but with goats... let\\\'s never think about that again. Anyway, they\\\'re pretty good.

can we get a clarification on that please?

Generally, \\\ means HTML is puking when trying to speak like people.

\ is the escape character; I've seen this often, and it's usually a case of misplacing the escapes. You need to escape ' and \ itself, so it probably got typed twice and both were escaped, leading to \\\'

Now I'm getting:
You slam the latte. It\'s sort of like kopi luwak, but with goats... let\'s never think about that again. Anyway, it\'s pretty good.

and

You drink latte after latte. These are sort of like kopi luwak, but with goats... let\'s never think about that again. Anyway, they\'re pretty good.

From the second paragraph of the syphon gun prototype's description:
In any event, the label on the side describes this backpack-mounted unit as an "broad-scale...

EDIT: Oh, and also, it's a "syphon gun prototype" in the description, but the Wok has it listed as a "prototype syphon gun".

Fixed those up, thanks!

The last sentence of Alpha's description:
The way its optics (and lasers) swing to face you strongly imply its talking about you.

Besides the noun-verb mismatch (singular noun and plural verb), there's the "its" problem again.
it's = contraction of "it is" or "it has"
its = possessive of "it"

Fixed those up, thanks!

From the description for cafeteria cauliflower:
You can tell this cauliflower came out of a cafeteria because it's still holding the shape of the ice cream scoop that filled it.

I think it should be the cauliflower that fills the scoop, not the scoop that fills the cauliflower.

...unless it's ice cream scoop-stuffed cauliflower.

I know what I'm making for dessert tomorrow.

When purchasing Expandable Lad's gloves:
The shopkeeper accepts your stars in exchange for a battle-scared pair of gloves. All the other heroes' sidekicks are going to be so jealous!

Is that supposed to be "scarred"?

Of course. Expendable Lad is never scared! Fixed that up, thanks!

But Lord does he have scars.

Oh and did you know we have 2 77 Habits of Highly Effective Heroess and 11 overamped PDAs? I did, because I spent all day counting.

Guess that plural needs fixing. Please let us know the fixed version in case you don't fix it today or the memento page doesn't update after your fix.

Fixed, thanks And it should show up on the memento page.

using Shiloh appointment schedule.

It sounds like a psuedonym so it's possible there's something fishy going on... maybe check and see if there's one tomorrow.

No more psuedonyms or suedeonyms, thanks!

Somnus watch talisman skill:

Swing Somnus's Watch

Shouldn't that be Somnus' instead?

Patojonas wrote:Shouldn't that be Somnus' instead?

Either's appropriate, although APA and CMS both prefer 's after singular proper nouns ending in s.

Cheers!
Kinak

multiple use:

You load a discs into your SQUID player and enjoy an extended retelling of your adventures with the Nostronomian.

Also, from the journal messages:

The alien that helped you before has gone missing, apparently taken to Shiloh Sanitarium.

When you fought the Nostronomian in Shiloh Sanitarium, it dropped a ...

Should be good, thanks!

when looking for the alien after the 120 minutes:

A badge on the scrap says "Shiloh Sanitarium Orderly" in large, friendly letters.
Huh. You're not sure if it's more surpising that Shiloh has orderlies or that they were out here.

Fixed, thanks! Might be a few more Sanitariums lurking around.

The last sentence, after defeating Dr. Somnus:
...instead setting up a store like it's ancestors.

The second sentence of the description of the Nostronomian signal whistle:
It's usefulness is somewhat limited...

Are you just messing with me now?

Also, one of Dr. Somnus' miss messages:
Dr. Somnus swings her watch while filling you in on the inmates daily lives...
That looks like it should be the possessive, inmates'.

EDIT: Also also, from the description for the watch of Dr. Somnus:
Honestly, when you're dealing with an item that got its powers from Mad Scientist playing with...
That looks like it should be "from a Mad Scientist".

Fixed those, thanks. Not messing with you, just terrible at its and it's

From hoy:
When using Crush Dreams against psychic immune (e.g. Dr Somnus): "You try to reach through your talisman to crus your foe's dreams, but they're too well hidden for that."

Crushed the typo, thanks!

The ion sprite buzzes behind your opponent and shouts over and over to get their attention.

When they finally give in and turn around, she shocks them for X damage.

Not going to argue if sprites have gender, but since it isn't human....

Patojonas wrote:Not going to argue if sprites have gender, but since it isn't human....

I try to do that in general, but I'm okay gendering sprites (whether fay or denizens of Mainframe or fay denizens of Mainframe).

Cheers!
Kinak

Who you calling an it?

Kinak wrote:

Patojonas wrote:Not going to argue if sprites have gender, but since it isn't human....

I try to do that in general, but I'm okay gendering sprites (whether fay or denizens of Mainframe or fay denizens of Mainframe).

Cheers!
Kinak

Ok, but the water sprite is an it, so if anything, consistency

Cristiona wrote:

Who you calling an it?

That too is an it.

You convince the city to get a giant vat of squid and a huge bag of orangutang food, mix them together, and hang them from the roof of your tower. Assuming the smell doesn't kill your entire league first, the Orwhal should find it hard to resist.

You have a giant bowl of orangoutang chow and squid dangling from the roof. That... seems dangerous.

Somebody must have really thrown your collective weight around with City Hall to get permission for that.

Which of the spellings will it be? They're both ok, but roof messages have the 1st version.

Also, wikipedia and http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/orangutan use "orangutan" as the main term.

Looks like we've been using orangutang. Thanks!

The bold text from the Disguise Foe skill description:
Can be change three enemies a day, plus once more for every Skill Point invested in it

Verb can be fix. Thanks!

From the second paragraph of the umbrella ghost description:
Anyway, your not sure if it has any useful job skills...
you're

Your right. Fixed!

Oops, missed one last month! From the second paragraph of the description for Expendable Lad's boots:
Expendable Lad had a horrible habit of jumping into the middle of things, even when he was terrible outclassed.

Terrible outclassed is kind of a great, if accidental, turn of phrase. Fixed!

One of the haunted umbrella's hit messages:
A freak storm washes over Twilight, but the umbrella just wanders off at least opportune moment, leaving you to get soaked.
It looks like there's a missing "the" between "at" and "least".

Fixed, thanks!

In the laughing yeti's description you misspelled the name of the other cryptid, it is written "mokole-mbembe" and should be "mokele-mbembe"

They might be a made up creature, but they have feelings!....maybe

My cryptid knowledge is appropriately shamed.

black ocelot:

The ocelot nuzzles up against you while you're struck by lightning. Twice. At the same time. She hits you for X damage.

The ocelot nuzzles up against you, then swipes at you like a jerk when you try to pet it.
The ocelot stops to clean itself.

it or she?

I'm pretty sure the kitty purring in my lap will maul me if I don't gender her feline minions.

alien ninja:

The alien disappears and reappears right behind you. He doesn't stab you or anything, but you nearly jump through the roof. It hits you for X damage.
The ninja disappears... and just doesn't come back for a while. You think he went for a sandwich or something.
The ninja blasts you with heat rays from its eyes. Turns out thermal vision isn't what you thought at all. It hits you for X damage.
The ninja tries to blast you with heat rays from its eyes, but you explain that's not what thermal vision means.

it or he?

Degendered!

same problem with the killer x-ray, all messages have "It", while the pronoun used is "He".

Gender is hard

This looks sucpiciously like your house. Trick-or-treating here would be weird.

Don't trick-or-treat at your own house or you'll go blind! Also, fixed.

I just noticed that all of the description pop-ups for item drops from Nutcracker's hat are missing the "Comes from the December 2011 Item of the Month" thingy. I did some more checking and saw the same thing for subscription vouchers. I'm not sure if those were intentional.